Develop and Realise: First Draft Feedback

When it came to my First Draft, I decided to ask various people including my peers, my parents, my tutor and other people for feedback on the First Draft of my Extended Project 2D Animation. There were many pieces of information to be said from the various people I asked for feedback, so I decided to break them down and sum them up in this post with: Positives, Negatives and What to Do Next Time. This was the feedback I got from my First Draft:

Positives:
+ Decent representation of what you wanted the layout to be
+ It's clear you took inspiration from your Research
+ It might be short but it's easy to see what is to come in each scene
+ The fades are nice and timed well
+ Plenty of unique moments happen within the short time span

Negatives:
- No evidence of music or sound effects
- I cannot grasp a sense of the "emotion" in this short first draft
- The drawings aren't very well detailed and don't illistrate the backgrounds or environments well enough
- It is too short
- The fades are timed nicely but perhaps aren't necessary all of the time as you don't see fades in all the time in the Research pieces you looked into but instead zooming animations
- The backgrounds make it look untidy and bland
- No colour makes the animation look dull
- It doesn't feel like an animation but more a collection of images faded together, similarly with a slideshow
- There isn't really a sense of style as the drawings aren't very detailed
- The story is about a boy and a bird but no bird is present in this short first draft

What to Do Next Time:

I should include music and sound effects in order to elaborate on the draft and create a sense of atmosphere, I should remove the layout boxes, add some colour and create more detailed characters and environments in order for there to be a clear sense of style and make it more enjoyable and interesting to watch in the long run. I should not fade in as much but instead use the zooming effect to my advantage and make sure that perhaps there is dialogue in there or more of a story to create that sense of emotion since it is quite a big part of the animation and not forgetting that even with it's short length, that with the next draft to include the bird.